Post by Varian Wrynn on Feb 28, 2009 17:51:38 GMT -5
First off welcome to Warcraft: Twilight Years. We're glad to have you here.
I have found find a few flaws in your application but most of them were relatively minor and I think you should be able to take care of them relatively easily. I can tell you put a lot of work into this character.
Your appearance meets the word quota just fine but I'm going to have to ask you to remove your parentheses comments now that I've reviewed it. Secondly though your armor is welcome to be red I should tell you that you are not part of Kael'thas forces. You are a High Elf (an elf that has not interacted with demonic magic’s) and thus your common colors would be various shades of gold’s, whites and greens. You are by no means required to have these colors but you should be made aware of this fact.
You will need to get those extra forty one words but I'm more than willing to give a few suggestions on things to write. For example you could go deeper into this "dark side". You could also talk more about For'nan outside of combat. As you know there are no great wars occurring and while there is much strife in the kingdom of Stormwind I would think you would like to have a personality in mind for out of combat situations. In turn your welcome to look at the other biographies for inspiration.
Orb of Fire? Please go into more detail here. You do not need to list your armor in items/weapons. You put that -appropriately- in the appearance section already.
Your history is fine for the most part but there are a few discrepancies in your timeline. First off the Ghostlands were only created after Arthas invaded and were formerly a part of Eversong Woods. Secondly, Sylvanas died defending against Arthas at the elven capital. It would have been impossible for her to lead a counter expidition to help defend the remnants of Quel'thalas. Finally, you are not Blood Elves. The Blood Elves are those who followed Kael'thas through the portal in Dalaran. If you are in Stormwind you were not one of these elves.
Your RP Sample was by far your greatest work and I heartily applause it. However that being said I'd appreciate if you would give a once over of not only your RP Sample but your entire application and look for obvious punctuation errors. It would make the entire thing look much more professional.
Fix what I've pointed out and I'll be glad to approve you and welcome For'nan Delron to the ranks of accepted characters.
I have found find a few flaws in your application but most of them were relatively minor and I think you should be able to take care of them relatively easily. I can tell you put a lot of work into this character.
Your appearance meets the word quota just fine but I'm going to have to ask you to remove your parentheses comments now that I've reviewed it. Secondly though your armor is welcome to be red I should tell you that you are not part of Kael'thas forces. You are a High Elf (an elf that has not interacted with demonic magic’s) and thus your common colors would be various shades of gold’s, whites and greens. You are by no means required to have these colors but you should be made aware of this fact.
You will need to get those extra forty one words but I'm more than willing to give a few suggestions on things to write. For example you could go deeper into this "dark side". You could also talk more about For'nan outside of combat. As you know there are no great wars occurring and while there is much strife in the kingdom of Stormwind I would think you would like to have a personality in mind for out of combat situations. In turn your welcome to look at the other biographies for inspiration.
Orb of Fire? Please go into more detail here. You do not need to list your armor in items/weapons. You put that -appropriately- in the appearance section already.
Your history is fine for the most part but there are a few discrepancies in your timeline. First off the Ghostlands were only created after Arthas invaded and were formerly a part of Eversong Woods. Secondly, Sylvanas died defending against Arthas at the elven capital. It would have been impossible for her to lead a counter expidition to help defend the remnants of Quel'thalas. Finally, you are not Blood Elves. The Blood Elves are those who followed Kael'thas through the portal in Dalaran. If you are in Stormwind you were not one of these elves.
Your RP Sample was by far your greatest work and I heartily applause it. However that being said I'd appreciate if you would give a once over of not only your RP Sample but your entire application and look for obvious punctuation errors. It would make the entire thing look much more professional.
Fix what I've pointed out and I'll be glad to approve you and welcome For'nan Delron to the ranks of accepted characters.
